Friday, October 3, 2014

essay 2

Alan Marx
September 29, 2014
Professor Young
English 1100
Essay 2 draft

            In the town of Basking Ridge New Jersey there is an issue that I feel needs more attention to be brought upon it. Basking Ridge is ranked number 5 on the on the safest places to live website and we as a town very proud of that. But the area that I am concerned with revolves around the schooling district. As we grow older in our teen years we become an age where bullying becomes a factor in our every day lives. In school when children are not around parental supervision kids can become physically, or mentally abusive to each other and in the community of Basking Ridge it has become an outgoing problem for many years, and now I feel is the time where the board of education needs to step in and help.
            Basking Ridge is a very beautiful town. It is full of some of the wealthiest people from our state. If you drive around the town you will notice these nice paved roads, big houses with the grass cut, people running, it makes me feel good to be able to come home and enjoy the place where I live. But growing up in this town from grades K-12 I witnessed many forms of bullying.
            Ever since the rise of social media it has become easier for kids to bully one another. When you’re sitting in your room at home typing away on either your computer or cell phone you can just watch a conversation whether its on Facebook or Yik yak, there’s always a problem that can start just by a few unkind words. When There are countless amounts of places where a child can easily be a target because everything is public now a days, and schools need to start looking into the social media. Like I said I grew up in this town and everyday someone would get mocked just over maybe a picture they posted.
            Bullying can go beyond just the school, as you can see from what ive told you it can go one anywhere. But there are other places where bullying can happen. For example in our town there is this big event called Charter Day. Charter day is meant for all of the towns businesses to come out and have a day of promoting their companies, its also where they set up these big rides for kids. During my middle school years every year there would be this big talk about who was going to fight one another on charter day. That’s all we would talk about, not what we were going to do, just who was going to fight. It would usually be announced somewhere on social media or it would be the talk of the school.
            Solving is problem is hard to do, because kids are sneaky and its hard to keep up with so many kids. Bullying is a big problem in our town and there needs to be more kids that step forward and say something to someone. But as we as people all know that kids will be kids and usually will not say anything. Kids usually will not want to be the “tattle tail” because; then again they would get bullied as well. It is time that the board of education looks into this problem. I feel like there needs to be a separate coarse for bullying in school. Schools should all have a bullying prevention class. I also feel like the bullying consequences should be harsher showing kids that if they do get caught bullying that they will never do it again.

            Bullying is a big problem in basking ridge NJ. Although it may be a beautiful, rich place to live there’s a big problem that revolves around the schooling districts and that problem is bullying.

1 comment:

  1. Alan, I like what you have done so far. Now, please consider doing the following:

    1) How can the BOE help deter bullying? Where is this in your paper?

    2) Describe the specific forms of bullying:verbal, physical? Use examples.

    3) What specific information can you write to show that it is an ongoing problem?

    4) Where in your thesis did you specifically write the problem? Be specific.

    Do my questions make sense?

    By developing your essay, you will more comprehensively describe the problem for your reader; thereby, making him/her believe that there is a problem in Basking Ridge.

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