Alan Marx
September 29, 2014
Professor Young
English 1100
Essay 2 draft
In
the town of Basking Ridge New Jersey there is an issue that I feel needs more
attention to be brought upon it. Basking Ridge is ranked number 5 on the on the
safest places to live website and we as a town very proud of that. But the area
that I am concerned with revolves around the schooling district. As we grow
older in our teen years we become an age where bullying becomes a factor in our
every day lives. In school when children are not around parental supervision
kids can become physically, or mentally abusive to each other and in the
community of Basking Ridge it has become an outgoing problem for many years,
and now I feel is the time where the board of education needs to step in and
help.
Basking
Ridge is a very beautiful town. It is full of some of the wealthiest people
from our state. If you drive around the town you will notice these nice paved
roads, big houses with the grass cut, people running, it makes me feel good to
be able to come home and enjoy the place where I live. But growing up in this
town from grades K-12 I witnessed many forms of bullying.
Ever
since the rise of social media it has become easier for kids to bully one
another. When you’re sitting in your room at home typing away on either your
computer or cell phone you can just watch a conversation whether its on
Facebook or Yik yak, there’s always a problem that can start just by a few
unkind words. When There are countless amounts of places where a child can
easily be a target because everything is public now a days, and schools need to
start looking into the social media. Like I said I grew up in this town and
everyday someone would get mocked just over maybe a picture they posted.
Bullying
can go beyond just the school, as you can see from what ive told you it can go
one anywhere. But there are other places where bullying can happen. For example
in our town there is this big event called Charter Day. Charter day is meant
for all of the towns businesses to come out and have a day of promoting their
companies, its also where they set up these big rides for kids. During my
middle school years every year there would be this big talk about who was going
to fight one another on charter day. That’s all we would talk about, not what
we were going to do, just who was going to fight. It would usually be announced
somewhere on social media or it would be the talk of the school.
Solving
is problem is hard to do, because kids are sneaky and its hard to keep up with
so many kids. Bullying is a big problem in our town and there needs to be more
kids that step forward and say something to someone. But as we as people all
know that kids will be kids and usually will not say anything. Kids usually
will not want to be the “tattle tail” because; then again they would get
bullied as well. It is time that the board of education looks into this
problem. I feel like there needs to be a separate coarse for bullying in
school. Schools should all have a bullying prevention class. I also feel like
the bullying consequences should be harsher showing kids that if they do get
caught bullying that they will never do it again.
Bullying
is a big problem in basking ridge NJ. Although it may be a beautiful, rich
place to live there’s a big problem that revolves around the schooling
districts and that problem is bullying.
Alan, I like what you have done so far. Now, please consider doing the following:
ReplyDelete1) How can the BOE help deter bullying? Where is this in your paper?
2) Describe the specific forms of bullying:verbal, physical? Use examples.
3) What specific information can you write to show that it is an ongoing problem?
4) Where in your thesis did you specifically write the problem? Be specific.
Do my questions make sense?
By developing your essay, you will more comprehensively describe the problem for your reader; thereby, making him/her believe that there is a problem in Basking Ridge.